Over the years when I’ve helped students with their
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Take a moment and think about how the admissions official will use your
For example suppose you are asked about a person who has affected you, a common question. Think of a person, say your high school German teacher and
On my first day of German class in my freshman year, I almost walked out of the class. Like many of my classmates, I felt confused by the new larger school with the new larger schoolmates and I felt intimidated. When I arrived late to German class, the instructor, Mr. Garrison lectured me in front of the other members of the class. I felt humiliated and was ready to change my schedule. I’m still not sure why, but for some reason I stuck it out. It turned out to be a
Mr. Garrison challenged me. When I didn’t do well on a quiz or mispronounced a word, I could feel Mr. Garrison’s disapproval. When I did well, I didn’t receive overt praise, but I felt proud I had met my teacher’s challenge. It wasn’t easy, but I worked as hard as I could. I ended up getting a C+ my first quarter; less than I had hoped for, but better than many of my friends. I continued to work and got a A- for the semester. I increased my efforts, determined to get a better grade. At the end of the year, I am almost positive there was a twinkle in Mr. Garrison’s eye as he handed me my grade report.
I ended up taking four years of German from Mr. Garrison. He taught me a lot, and not just German. He taught me to push myself, he taught me how to learn, most importantly, he taught me never to give up.
If I’d run out of Mr. Garrison’s classroom that first day, I don’t know if I would have ever learned these important lessons. I doubt if I would have worked so hard in high school. I doubt if many universities would even consider me for enrollment. Fortunately I didn’t drop out that first day, I have Mr. Garrison to thank for much of my success as a student and my growth as a person. I’ll always remember him and be grateful.
Notice that the essay shows progress from a poorer, immature student to one who has gained skills and has grown into a responsible young adult who wants to continue using the tools Mr. Garrison taught him while attending the university.
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